So I'm working on my pattern making skills and was drafting a shirt for a friend of mine. In general I'm rather pleased with the result, but I want your honest opinion on possible improvements. I used the new Rundschau draft from the Müller book, but have to admit, my overall expirience isn't that great. On several other occasion the shoulder width was way too small and the armhole needed rather severe alterations as well.
So this is the finished shirt after quite a lot of alterations already:
This is before I put the darts in the back (hence the excess of fabric), since the next one should do without any darts so I pinned how much I can take away from the side seams. I noticed that the drop on the left shoulder is off so I pinned this as well, it seems to be cut too sloped (don't know the right term). The neckline needs some alteration as well, there is some excess cloth around the collar which should be removed.
Other than that there are some unpleasent wrinkles from the chest down to the side seam, I don't really know of an easy way to get rid of them, so any advice would be more than welcomed.
The last thing I noticed are the wrinkles on the sleeves. I read that this might be fixed by rotating the sleeve, but I'm not sure how to go about it i.e. how to transfer this to the pattern in a way that you can set in the sleeve before closing the side seams.